Let me get this strait... You come onto my video and tell me to "learn how to write" and you think THIS is passable writing? The animation is pretty good, I'll give you that, but it looks and sounds like some of those crappy shows I used to watch on Cartoon Network that lasted two episodes. Normally I'd give you more stars for effort (as I believe in encouraging fellow animators) but if we're going by your standards of judging solely on "awful dialogue" and "lame concepts," then you get yourself half a star. Show me something decent you've made, and I'll actually care about what you have to say.